- In his “Overall comments” my tutor Robert appreciated my work.
"This is a strong first assignment showing good technical and visual control and an understanding of the vital relationship between subject and photographer in this ‘People Aware’ section.
I really like the diversity of visual ideas you present here – not only among the ‘assignment’ pictures but the other experiments – which shows you’re looking for diversity in facial expression, character, mood as well as ‘image’.
I also like the way you’ve thought about design and colour in these photos, which changes the mood. On the whole a good start, with only a few minor issues."
=> I think I must continue to improve my qualities in order to support the ability to express myself with a personal photographic language.
- Image 7. "This is my favourite shot here, maybe because it brings together everything you’ve done well here into a unique picture: the colour, the bold design and composition, Aline’s strong gaze and character.
It could be a wider view so that her ‘diamond shaped’ arms framed her head. That would create a circular composition in which the eyes go around from her face to her hands holding the dandelion.
The colours work well here, the dark green background, the pink top and the spots of yellow flowers. And you’ve nailed a really glowing even exposure on her skin."
=> I am very happy about this comment and I fully share it. I believe that the shot is the best of the assignment and it manages to show Aline's charme and intensity.
Things to improve
- Image 1. "I’m not sure whether the green and pink are distracting here or whether they enhance the photo. Possibly her collar does pull the eyes away from the pink lips."
=> Personally, I think that the green and pink enhance the photo. I tried to hide the pink collar with PS, but I really do not like the result.
- Image 3. "Again the colour co-ordination here is quite good – the simple blue background and the pale skin and white shirt work well together. You could probably reduce Yellow in the skin a bit – I guess that was a mixture of daylight and artificial light. Paler and cooler tones here would bring it more in harmony with the Pieta idea and enhance the ‘tiredness’. You could also reduce the overall brightness, making it darker."
=> Following Robert's suggestions I got indeed a better image
Before.
After.
- Image 6. "You’ve emphasised her nose and chin a little too much with this wide-angle shot from below. The window light is nice and gives the photo a ‘natural’ mood. You could probably rub out that wallpaper line on the wall in Photoshop to stop it distracting the viewer."
=> Frankly speaking, reviewing the original photo, I really can not understand how I could miss to correct the wallpaper line on the wall. Here there is the final result.
Before.
After.
- "Your blog is good. You are beginning to understand the ‘codes’ that make a portrait “intimate” or a gaze “intense” or intellectual. But you are thinking quite technically and aesthetically at times: about the image quality, light etc.
Try to add to this an understanding of the possibilities of the genre you’re your own responses to the works that you show and write about. Don’t just be ‘generalizing’. Put a “Research” section on your blog, not just a Reading section."
=> I added a "Research" section to my blog as requested. I understand the "extra mile" I am supposed to run with this section and I will do my best to accomplish it. However, I am sure it will not be easy!
- "You may also want to make that wonderful portrait smaller on your ‘home page’ – it necessitates a lot of scrolling."
=> Done.
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